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Old Aug-10-2007, 08:55
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It's cool for a poem-ish thing about our protest for legalizing cannabis. Rap has something in its written form called Structure, it is your setup, it makes it easier to read and more enjoyable. I'll show you an example:

I smoke 20 sacks after I eat,
order pizza and get a bag on my street//

Smokin' that shit with no Sticks-N'-Seeds,
Our nugs tight as fuck like Chicks-In-Jeans//

Call me up, hear the Bong-Bubblin',
Throw my tape in, get my Song-Rumblin'//


^That's a proper form of structure, I'm not trying to be an asshole I'm trying to make your art more enjoyable.

B.t.w, 1 bar = 2 lines, try spacing out your bars so your reader understands the rhymes at the fullest potential. I just add the "//" to indicate the end.
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